I stumble down the wet clumps of clay,
The dirty dark grey clay mold's my feet with every step,
I step on the boiling sand,
I sprint to the shimmering clear blue water,
It's cold and refreshing as it touches my dry skin,
I get dehydrated so I leap out of the water,
And rush to get a Fanta and lollies,
I hate Stratfords hot days
Hi Danni,
ReplyDeletewell done on your poem its really descriptive.
Remember to make sure your sentences make sense.
Marissa
Hello Danni its me,
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you describe the clay,
this is a very descriptive poem,
but try to not have so many I.
Hi Danni,
ReplyDeleteWell done on your poem its very good. Its very good.
Very good descriptive language. I like it. Its a very good descriptive poem.
Tamara
Great story danni.
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