Tuesday, 9 February 2016

   Summer days
I stumble down the wet clumps of clay,
The dirty dark grey clay mold's my feet with every step,
I step on the boiling sand,
I sprint to the shimmering clear blue water,
It's cold and refreshing as it touches my dry skin,
I get dehydrated so I leap out of the water,
And rush to get a Fanta and lollies,
I hate Stratfords hot days

4 comments:

  1. Hi Danni,
    well done on your poem its really descriptive.
    Remember to make sure your sentences make sense.
    Marissa

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  2. Hello Danni its me,

    I really like the way you describe the clay,
    this is a very descriptive poem,
    but try to not have so many I.

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  3. Hi Danni,
    Well done on your poem its very good. Its very good.
    Very good descriptive language. I like it. Its a very good descriptive poem.
    Tamara

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  4. Great story danni.

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